tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post3167965567265584708..comments2024-03-08T09:52:59.827-05:00Comments on Middle Passages: The Right Perspective - IWSG January 2021Lizahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16170701034715108039noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-33003713449898160002021-01-07T19:58:28.113-05:002021-01-07T19:58:28.113-05:00If only she could think of a clever reply to the i...If only she could think of a clever reply to the informative message, but she was beckoned to dinner. <br /><br />Well, I had to try, but I'm probably a lost cause! Thanks Liza!<br /><br />JulieEmpty Nest Insiderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10074223969046687064noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-24925873966349892652021-01-07T19:47:26.423-05:002021-01-07T19:47:26.423-05:00Oh these are good! So easy to get lazy and forget....Oh these are good! So easy to get lazy and forget.<br /><br />On another note, I'm thinking of you today, thinking and feeling about all my American friends in fact, and I send you much love and prayers. May basic goodness prevail.Jan Morrisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12727266796590751202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-67243999918229914972021-01-07T14:55:41.593-05:002021-01-07T14:55:41.593-05:00I love your examples:)I love your examples:)Sandra Coxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03814573408898140885noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-40725212843867049232021-01-07T08:08:33.577-05:002021-01-07T08:08:33.577-05:00Hi Liza - love your examples, and agree with them....Hi Liza - love your examples, and agree with them. I really do not like weak endings ... where the story sort of fizzles out - puts me off the author. All the best for 2021 - HilaryHilary Melton-Butcherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17596532480645510678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-18402901066679932342021-01-06T22:19:21.941-05:002021-01-06T22:19:21.941-05:00I laughed as I read your post, Liza. I have spent...I laughed as I read your post, Liza. I have spent countless hours teaching young writers to show not tell! Great examples. Yet I'll make the same mistake in my own writing. Thanks for the reminder. Take care.Fundy Bluehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02132147630106183853noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-75494847666458663102021-01-06T22:17:33.672-05:002021-01-06T22:17:33.672-05:00Those are the first key phrases I look for when I ...Those are the first key phrases I look for when I edit.Lynda R Young as Elle Cardyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09975442291393246148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-18673193705821012542021-01-06T19:26:22.449-05:002021-01-06T19:26:22.449-05:00Those are great examples of show not tell. I admit...Those are great examples of show not tell. I admit it took me a while to see the simplicity of it. Susan Gourley/Kelleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02669793865290876168noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-52901229670611180122021-01-06T17:03:03.310-05:002021-01-06T17:03:03.310-05:00I love these examples! I've been trying to go ...I love these examples! I've been trying to go through my own work and find those kinds of filler words that could be better written sentences. Sarah Fosterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09481750127533816819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-6673142334897150752021-01-06T12:32:36.411-05:002021-01-06T12:32:36.411-05:00When I fist started writing, I had my hand slapped...When I fist started writing, I had my hand slapped by a great editor for using so many filter words. You've explained why not to use them perfectly.cleemckenziehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05614478740889477584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-75717712929944320872021-01-06T12:22:15.732-05:002021-01-06T12:22:15.732-05:00Those are great examples. I really try to avoid &q...Those are great examples. I really try to avoid "feel" in my own writing. Hope you got through the holidays okay. I thought about you. I hope this is a better year for you.Natalie Aguirrehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03756087804171246660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-89885045287444951822021-01-06T10:57:56.670-05:002021-01-06T10:57:56.670-05:00I like becoming the character too. Excellent examp...I like becoming the character too. Excellent examples!Gwen Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13132836346305559246noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-23794971800788795232021-01-06T10:26:45.188-05:002021-01-06T10:26:45.188-05:00Great examples! I've made those mistakes, but ...Great examples! I've made those mistakes, but I don't like them. :)<br /><br />Happy 2021!Tyrean Martinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15356604721537744361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-22596000139904584362021-01-06T10:07:37.643-05:002021-01-06T10:07:37.643-05:00Yes! I know what you're talking about. And it&...Yes! I know what you're talking about. And it's something I try to avoid in my writing. Thanks for the reminder ;)Nick Wilfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03841776353790635132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-41194947970066706042021-01-06T09:32:28.981-05:002021-01-06T09:32:28.981-05:00Those examples are brilliant! Can I share them wit...Those examples are brilliant! Can I share them with the author I'm working with now? He needs that kind of help.L. Diane Wolfehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06425864276166334896noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-12412003177549955752021-01-06T09:07:05.872-05:002021-01-06T09:07:05.872-05:00Good examples, Liza. Those words - "I knew&qu...Good examples, Liza. Those words - "I knew" etc - tend to create a distance between the reader and the characters.Madeline Mora-Summontehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05529397293165046430noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-14990613801598316542021-01-06T07:43:43.880-05:002021-01-06T07:43:43.880-05:00good examples. I'm inclined to get annoyed at ...good examples. I'm inclined to get annoyed at a book where the writer is trying way too hard to be literary - way too many "big" words and phrases. The writing has to flow as far as I'm concerned. <br />Hope your new year has begun well and that you are happy with your writing and editing. If not, show us some of your grand photography - I never get tired of the scenery. Take careJoannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11604494404874408870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-24399047209819182842021-01-06T06:25:41.865-05:002021-01-06T06:25:41.865-05:00Those are great examples. My critique partners are...Those are great examples. My critique partners are finishing up with my latest and I will remember those examples as I make edits.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.com