tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post4992536876520616631..comments2024-03-08T09:52:59.827-05:00Comments on Middle Passages: NamesakeLizahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16170701034715108039noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-26030368808158636152011-03-30T03:28:29.307-04:002011-03-30T03:28:29.307-04:00Liza--I could make the argument that it's only...Liza--I could make the argument that it's only good and proper to show up late to read a post about a man destined to show up late (or not at all!)...but I suppose that would be a specious gamble of an excuse.<br /><br />I thought this was brilliantly constructed and voiced, and crafted so economically! You really did pull me in and I was right perturbed at the end, and sad that he couldn't find his way.<br /><br />Nicely done, thanks for being a part of the blogfest, and a belated Happy St. Pat's to you also!Jon Paulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07824815967445843124noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-46196646832005723212011-03-25T15:22:36.235-04:002011-03-25T15:22:36.235-04:00Donna hit the nail on the head: you captured the a...Donna hit the nail on the head: you captured the alcoholic and his denial. Wanted to smack him. Well done!Kittie Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07756250649095903317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-47981597503443811672011-03-20T09:25:24.057-04:002011-03-20T09:25:24.057-04:00You really did a good job of building the tension ...You really did a good job of building the tension of this guy trying to get to his daughter's wedding. I was genuinely disappointed when he gave up. Nicely done. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-60001838231899413072011-03-18T23:34:15.875-04:002011-03-18T23:34:15.875-04:00I've had this up for a while so I would rememb...I've had this up for a while so I would remember to come back to it. I wanted to read it when I had time to enjoy it. I knew it would be good, and it was. Lots of tension in this without having much action at all. Just an alcoholic trying to make it sober to his daughter's wedding. So, so sad. I hurt for Bethie and never even met her. You've got an amazing handle on characterization and emotional impact. When he walked up to the bar, I wanted to shout, "NO! Keep moving!" In that moment, you had me by the throat, hoping he'd keep going, even though you know there's a good chance he won't. It's that hope that drives us. So well done!Carolina M. Valdez Schneiderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11589934533051907801noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-89472110442100119432011-03-18T19:48:02.590-04:002011-03-18T19:48:02.590-04:00This was so sad! Addiction is such a hard thing t...This was so sad! Addiction is such a hard thing to kick. Very well written!! You may not be a short story expert, but you certainly write like one. I'm a new follower!Jennie Baileyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02088195986628533511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-9377204581630484912011-03-17T22:13:47.048-04:002011-03-17T22:13:47.048-04:00Very well written.
As the other said, I want more...Very well written.<br /><br />As the other said, I want more. I like your description in the beginning, Nice unusual details. Like slipping into shoes with no socks. <br /><br />Nice to meet you, Liza. I'm a new follower.<br /><br />MichaelMichael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-24239990382806331412011-03-17T21:29:29.965-04:002011-03-17T21:29:29.965-04:00Very emotional piece! Well written, I could feel t...Very emotional piece! Well written, I could feel the urgency.<br /><br />Thanks for participating!alexiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07122487552931794871noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-62875887928626383422011-03-17T20:53:10.378-04:002011-03-17T20:53:10.378-04:00Wow, very nicely told. I'm hopping on over fro...Wow, very nicely told. I'm hopping on over from the blogfest. Nice to meet you and your blog.<br /><br />Happy St. Patty's Day! :)PK HREZOhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11650153097981426833noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-35448541977536697092011-03-17T20:24:09.073-04:002011-03-17T20:24:09.073-04:00I think you did a great job capturing the nature o...I think you did a great job capturing the nature of an alcoholic, as well as the sensations he experienced. I sensed no lack of expertise. Lovely.Carolinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17889762915886434493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-69703475694127719572011-03-17T18:13:43.127-04:002011-03-17T18:13:43.127-04:00You really captured Billy's problem an eluded ...You really captured Billy's problem an eluded to the effects on others. A true and common sad story.<br />Great job.Mary@GigglesandGunshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07350818228268801008noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-79877280911886091392011-03-17T15:39:37.471-04:002011-03-17T15:39:37.471-04:00Ah, that was great. Captured the alcoholic's ...Ah, that was great. Captured the alcoholic's guilt and denial perfectly.<br /><br />Well done.<br /><br />.........dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-40402794794731731502011-03-17T15:39:22.443-04:002011-03-17T15:39:22.443-04:00Oh, so sad! Great story though! Tough to be the ...Oh, so sad! Great story though! Tough to be the daughter of a drunk on a special occasion when you need him...Hart Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17599570189253229318noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-72780233152151267232011-03-17T14:42:54.723-04:002011-03-17T14:42:54.723-04:00Wow! Very different take! I like the twofer too! T...Wow! Very different take! I like the twofer too! Thanks for entering! You can count yourself officially entered in the contest too! Awesome post! Well writen!!Colene Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06086195075690893194noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-50173970619809114172011-03-17T14:36:55.161-04:002011-03-17T14:36:55.161-04:00This was such a different story. No happy ending. ...This was such a different story. No happy ending. But Bill was true to his character and sad as it was, how could it end otherwise (even if we didn't see it coming)?Helen Gingerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09794759602654727110noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-52984770097760729882011-03-17T13:33:20.151-04:002011-03-17T13:33:20.151-04:00I thought this was well written, though sad.
Nancy...I thought this was well written, though sad.<br />Nancy<br /><a href="http://nrwilliams.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">N. R. Williams, The Treasures of Carmelidrium, Special .99 through April 30</a>N. R. Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02174506528962095858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-22589116996702323762011-03-17T13:11:59.352-04:002011-03-17T13:11:59.352-04:00I don't know what to say. I'd read on, Liz...I don't know what to say. I'd read on, Liza. It's very good writing. The first sentence made me stumble for some reason. Maybe play with it a bit. Otherwise, you've got a great short story here. I feel sorry for old Bill and I also wanted to push him down the flight of stairs. You got me, girl. :)Happy Saint Paddy's Day. :)Robyn Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17356555082768185840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-39286836019505306322011-03-17T12:54:21.109-04:002011-03-17T12:54:21.109-04:00It was good enough for me to want to smack the cra...It was good enough for me to want to smack the crap out of him. LOL I really enjoyed it! Well done! I'm envious!Empty Nesterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14060983954463697344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-75399073113386877422011-03-17T11:26:07.966-04:002011-03-17T11:26:07.966-04:00That was terrific, Liza! I felt as though I was ri...That was terrific, Liza! I felt as though I was right there with Bill as he selfishly rationalized his way out of showing up at his only daughter's wedding.<br /><br />I'd have loved to have kept on reading. You had my full attention.<br /><br />Well done, you!<br /><br />Happy St. Paddy's Day!<br />~Mrs BMary Sullivan Frasierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10796241299065062308noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-90290264661459268742011-03-17T10:36:06.429-04:002011-03-17T10:36:06.429-04:00Tisk, tisk I guess it really is hard to change.Tisk, tisk I guess it really is hard to change.Southpawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16539290964546504171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-77876459853984015682011-03-17T09:47:03.509-04:002011-03-17T09:47:03.509-04:00i kept wanting to push him..i kept wanting to push him..glnrozhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12922837344762102334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1907885067602758337.post-90584423614511255962011-03-17T08:57:07.106-04:002011-03-17T08:57:07.106-04:00Ha! Indeed. What is to be done? Good one Liza.Ha! Indeed. What is to be done? Good one Liza.Bish Denhamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13359927719391990534noreply@blogger.com