It wasn't just the murder, he decided. Everything else
seemed to have conspired to ruin his day as well. Even the cat. Well, especially the cat. If it hadn’t been for her, he would have been
far out to sea on the Sara Belle, not tapping his toes in the waiting room at
the veterinary clinic when the man in the custom suit strode in.
“Urinary Tract Infection.
You’ll have to take her.” Rena had pronounced before bolting out the door
late for her 8:00 a.m. meeting. Stan
hadn’t even had a chance to reply “You’re kidding me, right?” before Rena’s car
engine rumbled to life. Cleo, sensing
her mistress’s paramour was up to no good, leapt to the top of the dining room valance
and stared down at him as if to say, “Just try it, buddy.”
One long scratch across his cheek later, Stan sat on the
wooden wall bench staring at advertisements for vegetarian kibble, satisfied he’d
controlled his impulse to ring the damn cat’s neck, when the guy had entered the
clinic and surveyed the room. His
shoulders threatened to pop the seams of his suit. Stiff comb marks traveled toward the back of
his head. He’d glanced Stan’s way before
walking through the swinging door to the exam rooms. This guy hadn’t trailed behind some
hulking Great Dane or German shepherd and unlike
Stan, he hadn’t juggled a bulky carrier filled with hissing, yowling feline. He'd appeared in the middle of a snarling, moaning, meowing veterinary
clinic attached to nothing at all. That was Stanley’s first clue.
The pop, pop, pop setting off a chain reaction of barking
and wailing behind the door wasn’t so much a second clue, as it was a
pronouncement. Christ, Stan thought,
standing up beside Cleo’s carrier. All he
wanted was a day off.
“Hang on Cleo,” he called over his shoulder as he yanked his
badge out, reached for his gun and strode toward the door marked “Private.”
Whatever was behind that door, he was done with Rena and her
foul cat after this. That was the one
thing he knew for sure.
11 comments:
Good job Liza! That's what flash is supposed to do: leave us wondering and wanting more. Good character portrayal.
Loved this!! It's packed with such black humour and stand out Stan! LOL! Oh you should add this to the thread over at the Guardian!!!! Yay!!!! Take care
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Excellent! And you've obviously owned pets as you described the situation perfectly.
This was great! I totally wanted to read more!
Bad day all the way around. Bad day for Stan. Really bad day for the vet or whoever received the "pop, pop, pop." Great flash fiction. Loved it! I really want to know how this ended!!!
hooked! tres Noir :)
Oh, very well done! I liked this a lot!
Poor Stan. Poor Cleo! The poor vet.
Excellent good! I was there. Well, I'm into vet waiting rooms these days so I was REALLY there. Can't we have some more pleeeeze?
Oh my gosh! That was great! But I wanted to keep reading!
Uh-oh...the cat's outta the bag :)
Cool flash!
Dynamite! You packed a lotta happening into a little bit of words, and left us wanting more. Terrific job. You are one talented writer, lady.
Happy weekend.
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