IWSG: Writers helping writers. The brainchild of our fearless ninja leader, Alex Cavanaugh, this month's co-hosts are: Stephen Tremp, Pat Garcia, Angela Wooldridge, Victoria Marie Lees, and Madeline Mora-Summonte.
The
holidays had passed and it was time to get back to business. I sent out
my first query since early December and the ensuing rejection arrived in
my inbox less than two hours later.
Yikes. Record-breaking in terms of turn around, wouldn’t
you say? It would have been a demoralizing, too, if there wasn’t a
proverbial silver lining attached. In her response, the agent included two
sentences of thoughtful, specific criticism that stopped me dead,
because it related to something that had been worrying me.
“Ditch your prologue,” she said. It eliminates the conflict right up
front.”
Gulp. Yes, but…
That.
Means.
More.
Sorry. I mean revision.
Now, I’m not going leap into the “to prologue or
not to prologue discussion.” In my mind, there are places for them, if
executed correctly. Note the key words…”if executed correctly.” I had
begun to wonder if my prologue was hurting me,
and the agent’s feedback validated my concerns. Now, I had actionable feedback I
suspected was spot on. This was the first response that said anything more than, “I like your
voice, feel free to query me with your next project,” and “Thanks, but
the story is not for me,” or “Nice idea but I don’t think I’m the one to
sell it.” But, was I supposed to tear up my manuscript based on one agent's feedback?
After wringing my hands for a while, I sent the manuscript to a trusted author/reader
who hadn’t seen this version of the story. Surprise, surprise, she
agreed with the agent, but, God love her, she talked me off the ledge by
convincing me the changes would be easy to make.
Before long, I tamped down on the urge to stab out my eyeballs and got back to work.
That means, rather than participating in the IWSG
Twitter Pitch on January 18th as I had vowed to do in my last post, I cut
and pasted and layered in detail…AGAIN. I’ve edited this manuscript so
many times now, I‘ve lost track.
A month later, I’m grateful. That agent did me such
a good turn. Instead of replying with a standard rejection or worse,
deleting my book into a black hole, she took thirty seconds
to offer her opinion on corrective action, and I've learned a hard lesson. It's not over until it's one hundred percent the best book I can write. Had I listened to my gut, I would have known it was only ninety-five percent there. Several months lost and queries wasted, simply because I wanted to believe my story was done.
I understand I’ve lost my chance with this particular agent, but I tell you, if I wasn’t respectful of how
much junk must hit her inbox, I’d write her a thank you note.
21 comments:
Sometimes we need to know exactly what is wrong. She did help you by telling you just that. Glad it's a fix that's doable.
That is absolutely wonderful that you got back something other than the standard response. You know, I have a prologue too, but I am not going to ditch mine at the moment. I'll wait to see what happens.
Keep at it. You're making progress.
All the best.
Shalom aleichem,
Pat G @ EverythingMustChange
Thank you, thank you, thank you! I've had a ms out for over a year now. I had one good bite where they asked for the whole, but it went nowhere. I've been denying the truth. There is something wrong with my first chapter, but like you I didn't want to admit it to myself. Now, when my current ms is chilling before revision time, I will go back at it.
By the way, there is no law saying you can't resubmit to that person. I know there are conventions, but really - why not? Tell her the truth - that you took her suggestion and how you'd like to work with someone who was clear and helpful and swift!
That is awesome that the agent took time to give you advice rather than just an outright rejection. Glad you could hear it and the revision worked. Good luck with the querying.
What a great (and awful) experience! I had a short story I really, really loved and had the most incredible chance to have it critiqued, in person, by Jane Yolen. She told it was a fine story, but the ending was wrong and gave me a tip on how to change it. I did. It was the first short story I sold, and to SPIDER, no less. What a great lesson! Positive criticism can be our very best friend.
That's great that you received such a helpful response! I would count that as a double win because that agent saw something in your writing that made it worth their while to give a more personalized response.
First off, I understand the horror of an "instant" rejection. Even if you've steeled yourself, it's hard. But it was a "good" rejection. She cared enough about your work to offer a comment. Sounds like you've worked your way through it for an even better manuscript. Congrats to you and keep plugging. It's a journey and you'll get to the promised land.
This is an excellent reminder to trust our guts and to trust the story. You already had suspicions the prologue wasn't working and they were confirmed.
Another Twitter Pitch or something similar will come along and this time you will be more than ready. :)
Said and received in the right way, constructive criticism can often be just what we need. Good luck with the book.
As much as it hurts, sometimes being cruel is really being kind. It was so awesome that the agent took the time to give you personalized feedback. That beats a boilerplate any day. Best of luck with your revisions
That was a nice silver lining! Prologues are tough.
That was good of her to do that. Your writing must have impressed her in some way or she wouldn't have bothered.
I once had an agent reply (with a standard rejection) within a couple of hours of sending it out. Yours was an interesting twist. So go for it, ditch the prologue.
Constructive criticism is much better than a form rejection slip at least. That was kind of her to offer that encouragement. Glad it is going to be a relatively easy fix for you.
Two agents that rejected my query gave me great advice. It sure helped turn me in the right direction. Regarding prologues, I don't mind them if they're not too long and make sense.
That's great you received a personal response rather than an automated email. Such encouragement there. I could wallpaper my house in generic agent rejection letters.
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At least you received constructive advice from the agent instead of an automated response. A positive sign to keep going.
Hi Liza - well that ended up being good news ... and we never know where insightful information is going to take us - I'm so pleased for you = cheers Hilary
Liz, Did you thank the agent and ask if you could resubmit after you follow her stellar advice? If you have thanked her but not asked if she would take a second look, you can start your query with a thanks and how her advice helped you. Best Wishes!
I'd say that particular silver lining more than made up for the dark cloud. Helpful feedback like that is exactly what we all need. If I were you, I WOULD send her a brief thank you note. No matter how full her inbox may be, I think an expression of appreciation would mean a lot to her. I doubt if many (any?) writers bother to acknowledge her help.
It's great that the agent took the time to offer you constructive criticism. It seems that so many people don't even know the meaning of those words anymore. Wishing you all the best on your revisions! Thank you for your kind words on my blog, and I'm sorry that I didn't respond sooner.
Julie
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